by SCALE GAMES
Ya there's still a couple areas I could fix up a little bit more if I had more time to think about it.
I may add a redo in the comments tonight as I wasn't really expecting them to use the revision I did as exactly as they did (note: I have no issue with the fact they used what I sent them, and they did change a few things to better suit what they wanted it to say.)
Cheers Eric , was hoping somebody would step in just didn't have the time this morning. You could be right Eric, Spanish is Scale Game 's first language. So it may been translated from that.
You are now official proof reader ;)
Great!! Waiting for more!!
The story was all there I just cleaned it up a little.
I'm assuming it was translated from another language? Would explain some of the very clunky grammar from the original story.
Anyway can't wait to see more.
Nice background story
Very nice. Much better with the corrections. Now more, more, more. :)