Aleron's Lie: Story-Driven Emotional Drama/Mystery Game

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    1. Kaela on

      I think some of the language needs to be tinkered with! The Kickstarter looks great, but the wording in some areas is either overly wordy or just underwhelming/ineffective. With the very first blurb about the game, I was underwhelmed. I don’t feel like it captured the more important elements, and it used a whole lotta words in the process.

      Maybe something like, “Aleron's Lie is a First Person Adventure that follows an odd duo on their quest to escape their respective, mysteriously-locked cabins, and allows you to develop their unlikely alliance in the process.” Obviously that’s worth tweaking, I’m not sure how formal you want it to be (like with “allows you” vs “allows the player”). I won’t be offended if you don’t use my edited version, of course, but I think it’s definitely worth re-examining. I’m also happy to go through and edit more of the writing if you would like, even if it’s just to get another person’s view of stuff that you can take from. :)

      Definitely following the campaign and hoping it will get funded! Looks like a really fun and potentially very impactful game. I’m excited to hear more in the future.

    2. RisingLane Creator on

      Thank you for the Feedback, Joshua and Jon. :)

    3. Russell Bunn on

      i cant want

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      Jon South on

      One other thing I remembered I meant to say:
      I'd be wary of the 'writer' reward - at the very least add a caveat that any content they write is subject to approval and editing. It's an appealing reward, but including that kind of backer-created content is liable to make the tone of the game uneven - especially if they're putting words into the mouths of the lead characters.

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      Jon South on

      I agree with Joshua about referring to Aleron in the third person. A couple of other points:

      Simplifying the last sentence of the Cabin section to "And his daughter's life is in danger' would be more effective.

      There isn't much indication of how the game plays - anyone who hasn't played the demo (or is deciding whether to try the demo) won't have much idea beyond 'first person adventure', which can mean several different things.

      The cast&crew section could include a link for more information about each person - previous work, twitter feed or whatever. I can google individual names, but it's nicer if I don't have to.

      I'd say 'soundtrack album' rather than just 'album' in the rewards, just for clarity's sake.

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      Joshua David Healey on

      Furthermore, it may help to elaborate on the story and gameplay in this first sections. Perhaps, include subtitles that explain gameplay features when adding pictures. Also, it may be best to refer to the player/main character by his name "Aleron" instead of saying "you". In the relationship sections using this wording will enable you to present the story better to the customer.

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      Joshua David Healey on

      looks like an interesting and suspenseful story/concept. I think you could improve the text to really bring this out. For example, in the cabin section try rephrasing. The current wording seems jumbled. Perhaps something like "Somewhere in Glacier National Park locked inside his cabin, Aleron fears for his daughter's life in the face of an unknown catastrophe. Now, working with a mysterious stranger, he must find his way out of the cabin and into the woods."

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An Emotional Dialogue-Focused Drama Inspired By Firewatch
An Emotional Dialogue-Focused Drama Inspired By Firewatch

Aleron's Lie is a First Person Adventure that follows an odd duo as they embark on a quest to find a way out of their respective cabins, forming an unlikely alliance in the process.

                                              

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We are listening to your Feedback! We will use the comments by the community to make the full game more enjoyable. :)
We are listening to your Feedback! We will use the comments by the community to make the full game more enjoyable. :)
"This project is going to be either my breakthrough or downfall...I really don't want the latter to happen because I love Aleron & Nora! I hope you too can see the potential in them."
"This project is going to be either my breakthrough or downfall...I really don't want the latter to happen because I love Aleron & Nora! I hope you too can see the potential in them."

Aleron's Lie is a Drama set in a Cabin in Montana, where you're locked up while your daughter's life is on the line and the only person you can talk to via Smartphone claims to be in a similar situation.

Explore the gigantic Cabin to find a way out and develop an interesting but odd relationship with a mysterious woman named Nora.
Explore the gigantic Cabin to find a way out and develop an interesting but odd relationship with a mysterious woman named Nora.
Call her or answer her phone calls and discuss the situation you're in.
Call her or answer her phone calls and discuss the situation you're in.

Somewhere in Glacier National Park locked inside his cabin, Aleron fears for his daughter's life in the face of an unknown catastrophe. Now, working with a mysterious stranger, he must find his way out of the cabin and into the woods.

It's comfortable here but you cannot stay here any longer!
It's comfortable here but you cannot stay here any longer!

You have a Smartphone that you can use to call a strange woman named Nora but you're not sure if she's trustworthy. Will you trust her and work together to find a way out of your respective cabins? Or will you destroy your relationship with the only person that's left to call?

Use your smartphone's camera to take pictures. Send them to Nora and receive pictures from her in order to help each other with making progress.
Use your smartphone's camera to take pictures. Send them to Nora and receive pictures from her in order to help each other with making progress.
Call Nora and tell her about your strange findings.
Call Nora and tell her about your strange findings.

The Puzzles will improve your relationship with Nora as you will need each other's trust to solve them but you're not sure if they're a waste of time. "Are these Vials really important or is it indeed just weird shit?"

Whether you trust Nora or not cooperation is necessary!
Whether you trust Nora or not cooperation is necessary!
The Ropes & The Ball: The first out of three unique Puzzles in "Aleron's Lie". Each of them requires communication, trust, and good decision-making skills. After all your daughter's life is on the line!
The Ropes & The Ball: The first out of three unique Puzzles in "Aleron's Lie". Each of them requires communication, trust, and good decision-making skills. After all your daughter's life is on the line!

After his wife passed away he was alone with his daughter Mirela. The father and daughter bond that was created over the years is a strong one but not necessarily a healthy one. 

Mirela is calling her father, although he told her not to do that.
Mirela is calling her father, although he told her not to do that.
  • Explore an amazing and gigantic Cabin set in Montana in the Glacier National Park
  • Use your Smartphone to stay in touch with a mysterious but charismatic woman named Nora.
  • Your choices will either build or destroy your relationship with the only person that's left to call.
  • Use your Smartphone to take pictures of your strange findings.
  • Use your Gallery to send these pictures to Nora and help each other with leaving your respective Cabins.
  • Cooperate with Nora and solve unique and challenging puzzles that could decide whether your daughter will live or die.
  • Learn what Aleron's Lie is.
  • And experience a Simple Story with Complex Characters that you will never forget.

In addition to all these features, the game will have an:

An Emotional Video Game needs an Emotional Soundtrack. Our amazing Composer Chris Heron knows how to achieve that:

6,000€ is all we need to pay the fees and produce "Aleron's Lie". With every Stretch Goal we reach we can improve your experience and create an even more impactful and inspiring Story.
6,000€ is all we need to pay the fees and produce "Aleron's Lie". With every Stretch Goal we reach we can improve your experience and create an even more impactful and inspiring Story.
We don't have any physical rewards so we can focus on the development of the game and eliminate all risks.
We don't have any physical rewards so we can focus on the development of the game and eliminate all risks.
The Game is already in development so once the campaign is successful we can fully focus on producing a high-quality game.
The Game is already in development so once the campaign is successful we can fully focus on producing a high-quality game.

Our primary focus is producing Aleron's Lie and to tell a Story Worth Telling. But it shall not end there. There are so many more Stories to tell.

"We want to tell more than one Story. There are an infinite number of Worlds and Characters to create that have the potential to change your life for the better."
"We want to tell more than one Story. There are an infinite number of Worlds and Characters to create that have the potential to change your life for the better."

We love what we do because we believe in the power of Story-Driven Games. The right Story with the right Characters can change your life. I know that's true. I know that because "The Last of Us" changed my life. I know we can have the same impact on others. 

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I have always cared about Excellence and Mastery. My Ultimate Goal in life is to create a Masterpiece. I know that "Aleron's Lie" will not be that Masterpiece but it is one of the many steps towards that goal. We appreciate everyone who wants to join us and support us on our way to Mastery :)

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This is not the complete team. The actual team size is 12. I'm really grateful that I am able to work with these amazing people. I appreciate the trust they had in me and this project.
This is not the complete team. The actual team size is 12. I'm really grateful that I am able to work with these amazing people. I appreciate the trust they had in me and this project.

Over one year ago, when I first started this project, I was assembling the Team. Already that was a big challenge and I was about to give up. 

I remember how I said to a friend of mine: 

"This project is going to be either RisingLane's breakthrough or downfall..." 

I said that because I had risked everything. I put all the resources that were left into "Aleron's Lie." 

He said, "If you don't want this to be your last project, then simply keep going!" 

I did and one year later this is where I am: It's up to the success of this Kickstarter Campaign and you guys! 

Do you care about Story-Driven Games? Then back our project and bring something great to life. You would love to but you can't? But you really care about Games and believe in the power of Storytelling like we do? Then you can Support us by sharing our campaign. That's very important as well. Thank you very much! :)

More Information about the Team:

John Ford: http://voiceoveraustin.com

Stephanie Morgan:http://singitsteph.tumblr.com

Sara Secora: http://www.sarasecora.com

Ahmet Koctar: https://www.kickstarter.com/profile/ahmetkoctar/about

Chris Holding: https://www.artstation.com/snoogens_effect

Michael Li: http://www.mikelimodeller.com

Miles Staplehurst: https://www.artstation.com/overlord_moiles

Dan Larkin: https://www.danlrk.co.uk

Chris Heron: https://chrisheronmusic.wordpress.com

Risks and challenges

All risks have been already taken. As long as we can pay the voice actors who are the heart of this game, the talented RisingLane Team will take care of the rest. That's how we have done it with the demo and when the Campaign is successful we will do the same with the full-game and deliver a high-quality product unless the whole cast and crew will be locked up in a Cabin with bulletproof windows. But that's unlikely...right?

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